Thursday, November 15, 2018

Flintstoning: Where Does It Start?



            Fred Flintstone dives into his car and spins his pins—the car lurches back—and only then is he on his Ya Ba Da Ba Doo way.  While he is in his car revving up his engine—himself—he’s getting nowhere.  And before he can move forward, he must recoil, like a cat, to get the purchase he needs to catapult forward.
            This is also true of any piece of writing in process.  We Ha Ya Cato (see “Chew Upon This) into the screen or page that is the vehicle for our thoughts.  Then we spin our pins—vroom vroom from our everyday banal lives into the promise and adventure of writing. We recoil from the task ahead, entertain doubts, try this and that.  Then the magic happens—we are anchored in some image or new idea—and we launch into our journey of discovery.
            Too often, though—all that spinning of the proverbial wheels—is left in.  And that’s sad, because we can lose our readers.  At best, our ideas will be diluted.  To use another metaphor, builders and window washers erect scaffolding to do their work.  They remove that scaffolding before they consider the work.  So much of an expected thing this is, that, as artists do, the architects of the Centre George Pompidou in Paris designed a building to celebrate scaffolding:

                     Image result for scaffolding building in paris

            In my writing workshops, one of the first questions we ask of a draft is “Where does it start?”  What we are looking for is that moment when the piece of writing catapults.  Let’s look at some examples:
                        The tragedy of Timon of Athens has many of the human conditions
            we find in our every day lives. Things like greed, generosity, vengeance,
            loyalty, betrayal are some of the features and emotions found in this
            Shakespearean play…

This paper continues in this vein, summarizing, listing, spinning a variety of ideas around for 2-1/2 pages and then we read this:

                        In Timon of Athens, Timon the profligate and Flavius the parsimonious
seem to be opposed personalities—one giving too much and the other holding back.
But, on delving more deeply into the text, we can see they are the same.

That’s where the paper starts—it has landed the helicopter (see Landing the Helicopter) and offered the reader a clear focus.  We know that from hereon in, we will learn something new and unexpected.

            Here’s a poem addressed to my husband.  Where does it start?

                        My father was a difficult man.
                        He was a homophobic, racist anti-Semite.             
                        He even denied that the Holocaust happened.
                        He cared more for his ideas, that he did for me.

                        My father wouldn’t lead me down the aisle—
                        you are Jew, and hadn’t asked him—
                        clinking cognac glasses for my hand…

            As you write, whether it be poems, essays, memoirs, plays, or any other form, identify that moment when the piece leaps forward.  And then be very brave—cross out that first Flintstoning line, paragraph, or ten pages.  Otherwise, in this day of Instagram and Tweets, you will lose your readers—and if it’s a teacher, your hope for a promising grade. 

More importantly, don’t clutter your mind—don’t blur your ideas with mere scaffolding and revving up.  Starting your work where it starts will inspire you to write in greater depth and length.


            And when you read, don’t tolerate Flintstoning, either—scan down the page and look for that moment of take-off.  Then read from there.  And if it doesn’t come, then the writer has not finished her/his process. In another post, we will consider the question of “Where does it end?”


Offer us an example of your own Flintstoning and where your piece actually started.






71 comments:

  1. Nadia Radwan
    Sadly, I feel like our current education system encourages “ flintstoning” . When Dr. rich was crossing out everyone's beginning paragraphs during out peer review you could see the confusion on everyone's faces. We all were thinking “what do you mean we don't need this?” We are all taught that you have to have an intro, we are all taught that this intro needs to have an opening line that starts broad, that we need to list our three main body points and then have a thesis. Even worse, we are forced to have a God awful conclusion that, as I was taught, is a rewording of our thesis, our three main body points listed AGAIN, and then a broad statement similar to our opening line in the intro. It really can't get more pointless than that. Despite me knowing how useless this method is I couldn't stop myself from implementing this ridiculous formula when I was trying to write my Timon essay. The entire time I was writing without an intro felt so unnatural that I had to write one. The same goes for my conclusion. Its like I was so used to wasting my readers time that I wanted to waste my own because you guessed it, when I got my essay back those were the very two paragraphs Dr. Rich crossed out! I think that a way I am going to go about preventing any more “flintstoning” in my Love Labour's Lost essay I am going to edit. Meaning the first draft may in fact include an intro or rather a paragraph or two where I am collecting my thoughts but they will be thrown out in my final draft. Before I used to think that was a waste of time. Why would I wrote something just to toss it away? Well looking back I think that was a rather foolish way to look at it because it's not really a waste of time. By writing out my initial thoughts and broad statements I am able to then collect my thoughts and focus.

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  2. Dr. Rich,
    Our peer review session was definitely an eye-opening experience. While reviewing everyone’s rough drafts, I was definitely a bit stunned at first. My rough draft was one of the first papers to be evaluated. Hearing that the paper sounded like summary, or that the paper didn’t dive deep enough, I was genuinely confused. I wasn’t mad at anyone, but I was annoyed because, even though it was a rough draft, I thought I was on the right track to writing a great paper. As I found out, I relied more on summary and paraphrasing than I realized. It was a tough pill to swallow, but it was also a learning experience. I realized that I did flinstone on some of my previous papers. I think that I was so used to my other teachers telling me that I needed an introduction with a thesis statement, body paragraphs, and a conclusion to make a complete paper that I would give a retelling of a story or article in my own words. It really is monotonous when you stop and think about it. Now, through my Shakespeare Survey class, I have learned to “land the helicopter” on one phrase or word and expand my thoughts from there without summarizing or paraphrasing. Constructive criticism is crucial for writers to become better and learn from past errors.

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  3. Dear Dr. Rich,
    I am so sad that I missed the peer review class, because I went into my first paper without a “parachute”. I have noticed how my writing starts with the formalities of what I think others expect and then I get that inspirational moment and I stop second guessing myself. I don’t even think about doubts.. and I am off, like horses in the hippodrome, racing to get to the finish line. My fingers tap dance over the keyboards at light speeds and everything else blurs out. This is when I have done my best writing, when I don’t think about who will read it, but just try to puke what I have inside on the paper (sorry about the imagery lol). So from now one, when asked to write a paper I think about the juicy details, what is important, how can I compare this with that, or if there is a back story to it… well in short, anything that will bring truth and originality. That first paper made me feel upset at myself for not opening up my mind to new ideas, for not being true to myself and just writing what I really wanted to. Similarly, with our third and last paper I am having the same sense. I want to write about how watching the movie really made me feel, but at the same time I am thinking about not offending anyone. In reality I have to keep in mind that this is my paper, my opinion and own it. Wonder when what others think about me started to matter so badly. English 3215 has been a slow journey back to finding things about myself that I thought were forever changed, not just about writing.

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  4. Dear Dr. Rich,
    When we had our first and only paper workshop, I was shocked and disappointed. The disappointment was not because my paper was considered not good enough; I was disappointed about how all of these years I was writing papers thinking they were creative but in reality they were just boring summaries. When it comes to the shocked part, I am shocked about how actually some professors taught me to write this way while telling me this way is the “Proper” way. I personally believe that in writing, there is no proper way; everyone is different and everyone has a different writing style. But there is no time to be upset about the past, I am glad that my eyes got opened late rather than not be opened at all. This workshop opened my eyes on my writing and from now on, I feel like I obtain the ability to distinguish whether my writing is a summary or creative. Even thought I do not like to sound redundant. But I have to give credit to Dr. Rich and my Shakespeare class for teaching me new things every day. I honestly learned things and still learning things that I never thought I was going to learn. It is amazing what a Shakespeare class can do. I am amazed and grateful.

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  5. Again, Professor Rich! Just another wonderful analogy that perfectly describes exactly what many of us go through but could not find the right words or phrase to describe it ourselves. I do not know how many times and how many years that I have been flintstoning. And not only that but the amount of hours and sometimes days that it takes for me to find my paperclip so that I can really start writing a great paper. It really took me by surprise how in class when we were doing our peer reviews of our papers that you would just read someone’s paper for like a couple sentence and just put a giant slash over there paper and say “This is not the beginning of your paper” and then show them where their paper starts (if it even does end up starting on their rough draft). That was very overwhelming for me because of how long it takes for me (and many other people as well) to stop flinstoning and start our papers, but I know that you were only doing that to make our papers better and to have our work be something that we can be proud of.
    Grace Carranza

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  6. Before writing my poem, the question is how to do I start? Instead of just diving into it, I would say something like “I am lost” which is not part of the AID( Action, Imagery, and Dialogue). It is like I have to put down my thought process before the poem can really “take off.” It helps most of the time, but then that process becomes part of the poem. I struggled in the beginning with Flintstoning and I still struggle. When Dr. Rich asks where the poem began, I became lost because I did not know what to say. While doing revisions on my manuscripts, I asked the same question on each of my poems I was able to revise it.
    Priscilla B.





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  7. I never really thought about it before, but gosh have a flinstoned a lot before! And I am glad I now have a term for it. Although after taking your class this semester, seeing your comments on my papers, and reading this blog post I’ll avoid flinstoning at all costs.

    In the past I always thought it was okay to flinstone. I thought professors wanted “meaty” paragraphs, not “boney” ones. So, I guess that’s where my flinstoning came in and I wrote a bunch of un necessary information.

    I’ve learned that it is much more important to get right to the point, introduce new ideas and to not be redundant. Also, if your just flinstoning it’s gonna take forever to get to the good stuff!

    I also feel like sometimes we have good ideas with bad delivery because of flinstoning. Like you said Dr. Rich, we shouldn’t blur our ideas. Just get to the point.

    I honestly find myself flinstoning just so I can make that page requirement that professors set, but I’ve noticed that a lot of professors prefer quality over quantity. I believe it is better to have three unflinstoned pages then four flinstoned pages. Am I right?

    Arlyn A.

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  8. Dr. Rich,

    I find myself almost always flinstoning when I write my papers. I was always taught to write flowery intros that never get to the point. I was also taught to "expand" my thoughts to the point where I blabber on and on and miss the whole point. I realize now how annoying that is. We need to stop flinstoning and get to the point. Educators need to stop promoting flinstoning and have us express ourselves straight to the point.

    Sarah Otero

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  9. I would always be flintstoning my papers. Everything would be broad, general statements, leading up to my actual point. But this is not because I was just trying to reach the right number of pages we were assigned, it was not about padding. But because this is again something I was taught to do. It is actually encouraged in my opinion. Until I took your class. You taught me to get to the point and not to write any sentence that is not actually saying something. It needs to have content. Everything needs to add to your point. The peer review class we had was amazing. You were able to quickly read and tell someone that this was to be cut and that this should be where your paper starts. It was tough having to sit there and see how some papers were completely scrapped. But it was an eye opener that will help me in the future. Both in school and otherwise.

    - Madeline Romero

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  10. I unfortunately also missed the peer review class also. and i wish i would have went because maybe my fear about writing would have been gone by now. I have always been so nervous about my writing that it has held me back from many things, even getting a better grade in certain classes. i always have a hard time trying to find, where to start, will it be coherent, will i be judge etc...all these thing always get in my head and it stops me from thinking and it holds me back from writing. its crazy to think that when i was in my country i was good at writing and even used to write music. Now that i am learning a new language i feel like I am one of those flintstone's car but not moving forward at all. I can tell that your class has definitely pushed me out of my comfort zone and i have been able to be a bit more efficient in my writing then what i was before. sometimes i just need to get started then the rest of thoughts come in by them selves. definitely agree with the flintstone comparison because we most a take a step back to move forward. a similar comparison would an arrow. it must be brought back to be able to shoot forward.
    i really appreciate your posts and intentions to help the students. Dr. Rich.

    Willy Mena.

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  11. Seanette Martin
    February 16, 2019
    Eng 4817
    Prof Rich
    Flinstoning: Where Does it Start? Blog 7
    I have done workshopping before in many other classes, but the workshopping that was done in English Seminar is completely different from what I am actually used to. Doing this workshop really made me begin to ponder on where my poems actually begun. Of course to me when I wrote them I felt that they started at the beginning where I started them. Once it was worked through by my peers and prof I started to look deeper into my poem to see if there was somewhere else that could have been my beginning point. I still like where I started my poems but I also feel that I seen where they could have ended way before the ending.
    Reading through my classmates work I realized that workshopping is a very vital tool because we can help others to see what we can to do make our work better. Throughout my years off school when it comes to writing everyone wants things done their own way and it becomes confusing. One teacher/ professor ask for things set up this way and make it wordy where another one may say get to the point don’t give too many details. I spent so many hours and days trying to make things perfect for others when it comes to my writing but what about me and how I would like my paper to flow. I want to stay true to myself when it comes to my writing because writing is my happy place. To be honest I’m learning to write for myself and focus on where things really begin and end.

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  12. Workshopping was definitely a learning experience for all. Normally, in my other classes, we peer review with two or three other people. In Senior Seminar, we peer reviewed as a whole, which is a little intimidating, but super beneficial. I have always been insecure about my writing, as well as uncomfortable sharing my writing. I felt as if workshopping made me comfortable because it only helped me and made me realize where there is room for improvement. I also believe the peer reviewing other students paper’s also allows them to improve and visualize what they need to work on for their work as well.
    I discovered that my paper actually started as the third sentence of the first paragraph. I also discovered that there were two absolutely unnecessary paragraphs that were filled with exposition and no imagery, action, or dialog. Having Dr. Rich workshop with us is great because, in my past experiences with peer revision, it was aways bullshitted, and other students could care less about my paper. In this class, Dr. Rich, as well as the other students, really share ideas that will only better my work. I’m sure there are many students who can agree with me on that.
    Peer revision also allows extra eyes to catch any mistakes. Sometimes I re-read my work so much that I skim right over those errors. It is often hard to edit your own work, which is what makes peer revision and workshopping so helpful. I really enjoyed this blog, as well as workshopping with my classmates to only make our work better!

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  13. Brandon Smith
    In the story I’m working on for Senior Seminar, I was “flinstoning” at the beginning of my story by going into too much detail regarding the world I was placing my audience into. I did not know most of this information was meaningless or unnecessary until I had it pointed out to me during our first workshop. In other classes involving writing, I had been taught that in storytelling exposition was important so that the audience would be able to understand where they were and what was going on. However, as I found out from the workshop, this was simply not the case. My story truly began on the second page rather than at the beginning since it shows action and dialogue which is important in writing. There was also a small section on the third page which was flinstoning, so I had to get rid of it so that the story could get right into the action without getting off topic. By deleting the unnecessary details, I shortened my story from three pages to two and a half pages. This means that my story’s structure was drastically altered simply by getting rid of the exposition and getting right to the action.

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  14. I have failed to see the beauty of editing and workshopping my papers. Whenever I would get my papers back with yellow marks all over it, I knew that my paper wasn’t good enough. But as I furthered my education, I began to see that in this process of writing, my thoughts would become blurry and that showed in my writing. Sometimes I would even get repetitive instead of taking a break to allow my mind to create. There have been times where I would re-edit my paper four times until it’s at its best. In this process it has been an eye opener to improving my writing and be willing to be opened minded about my peers and professor’s opinions. I remember when one of my professors crossed out two paragraphs in the middle of my story and I thought to myself “Wow he’s a jerk”, but after meeting with him he pointed out why the paragraphs weren’t needed. I’ll never forget him saying “get to the point Jasmin”, and I’d say “I spent all night working on that paper and now, it’s all gone”.
    I was flinstoning in the middle of my story. I assumed that I needed to inform my audience every step of the way. I learned that some of the extra details were only doing harm to my creativity. My audience didn’t need to know every little detail to keep up with the protagonist. I kept adding details that had no significance or meaning. No purpose. It’s all a learning process and I’m getting the hang of this thing called workshopping.

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  15. Flintstoning

    I get the metaphor:
    My draft was cited for “Flintstoning”.
    In the short video clip, Fred Flintstone “revs up” a type of running in place, before he takes off. This revving up process, is what I would consider the back story. I thought I should provide backstory to my writing pieces. Much like when writing an essay, I thought writers should provide some background information before introducing the thesis.
    When I looked at my piece through the “Flintstoning” lens, I could see where it was unclear where or when the story began. My background information is perhaps a “stream of consciousness,” writing that is delaying the start of the scene. My intent was to use the setting to help the reader learn a little about my character’s lens.

    Take a look:
    Before:
    It get darker earlier now. It’s not even 8 oclock.
    The driveway is always dark. No parked cars here indicating life..just darkness. 100 feet from the train tracks. Last night slept through their noise for the first time l For two weeks it kept me awake, denying me sleep that I longed for. Peaceful, restful sleep. It’s remarkable that it only takes 1 night of sleep to recover the lost sleep from 3 months. This morning, I woke refreshed.
    The motion detector blinded me like that catches a deer in the road, but the voices, laughter, music, coupled with the sweet smell of barbeque and cigarette smoke captured my attention. Still consumed by the consuming smells, I will keep climbing the stairs, reaching for the door hoping to escape the wonder of all of it

    After:
    Setting:
    Dark driveway that leads into a house and a concrete backyard area.
    Her steps are light and gentle, protected from their ears and vision, but that beaming light exposed her. She keeps walking, speeding up the pace, trying to ignore that sweet smell of barbeque and cigarettes. It consumes her. But her feet can’t stop.

    Voice : Come over here and git some food girl.
    Donna: Still reaching for the door… I’m gonna check in..I don’t want to miss curfew.
    Voice: You aint gonna miss nothin’. Besides she’s out here.
    Donna:” Even in these sneakers, each step sounds like basketballs hitting the floor.”
    Donna: Hey.
    Voice: Hey.Git sumethin! There’s chicken and macaroni salad!
    Donna: Waving the smoke from her eyes. “ it looks good.”
    She wouldn’t refuse this time. The weight of her plate surprised Donna. The moonlight provided just enough light to see what seemed like a gift on Christmas morning.
    Voice: you play?
    Donna: Yea.
    Voice: We got next.

    This is my attempt at preventing Flintstoning. In the Before scene, my character is describing the setting first which delays the start of the story. In the After scene, my character opens the scene walking or sneaking into the driveway trying to avoid the others and features of the setting included within the scene.
    That is my attempt at preventing Flintstoning. I will consider this during the writing process.


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  16. Tina Gordon
    After reading this post gave me an eye opening with the different writing structures and what I need to include in my writing. In Dr. Rich’s Senior Seminar class, peer review session is different to other classes. Other classes are more of criticizing others work by looking at grammar, but in this class it’s not about criticism but to acknowledge others writing by looking at the good part of the writing and to help with developing the writing. I was surprised at the peer review session in this class because it gives me a sense of confidence to have others read and help me with where my work should start from with the positive feedback from everyone. I realize that I did a lot flintstone in my previous papers which makes my writing running on the spot not getting anywhere. And doing such writing always makes be frustrated because I am revving up and not able to go forward. I learned how to “land the helicopter” and start expanding my thoughts when writing.

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  17. Flinstoning is a very common thing when it comes to writers, in my opinion. At times free-writing will automatically give you a sense of telling a story without it truly beginning. At times getting to the point can be a bit difficult as we tend to give readers a background description so they can understand where we’re coming from. However, maybe not letting the reader know the detailed background is a chance for the reader to depict their own story. I noticed that when I right I don’t normally start off the ‘good stuff’ but I tend to give a background so it’s easier to understand where I’m coming from. I’m learning little by little on how to get to the point when it comes to my storytelling so I can keep the readers focus. Even when it comes to someone verbally telling me a story with an immense amount of background makes me lose my focus and overall interest in the story. That’s how I’m going to refer to the stories from now on.

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  18. Our review session in class regarding “Flintstoning” was an interesting topic. In my writing education, I have been taught to “hook your reader” as early as possible, and this topic of “Flintstoning” brings attention to the same issue. It is better to give away as little information as possible, to keep the audience guessing, and to spread out background information whenever it is unavoidable. For example, I am in the process of writing a memoir about the history of my relationship with my husband. The first draft started, “If you are reading this letter it’s because your father and I have finally, for one reason or another, decided to tell you how we met. His username was Batzmaru###, and mine was Gottaluvme538. Back when AOL was still using dial-up, they had chatrooms where a large group of people could go and try to connect with other people of the same interest.” In my second draft, I will be completely removing the first sentence, because that is where I am Flintstoning. I will start with something like, “Your father’s name was Batzmaru; mine was Gottaluvme.” I will most likely do something with that third line as well, since it is 100% exposition. The trick to providing background information is to do it in an indirect way while using action, imagery, and dialogue over exposition. For my memoir I will likely continue to freewrite for my drafts, and then address Flintstoning through the A.I.D.e. method during my subsequent revisions.

    ~ Sara Faulkner

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  19. Hi Dr. Rich,
    This blog talks about something that is super hard for me . . . see as I was typing that I realized I was Flintstoning. It is in my nature, or student nature I should say, to introduce and start off essays and responses in a standard way. It is robotic, but it is the way schools teach you. It was always funny to me how in school, there are so many "rules" to writing. I thought writing was supposed to be creative and free, just like in all those books and poems we were reading. But when we got to the assignments it was, "No quotes in the introduction," "You have to introduce the reader to your ideas, they don't know what you're talking about," and "start broad and then narrow it." So, after all the creative juice had literally been drained out of me, that was how I wrote. I used to enjoy writing and now it is another task. I also normally want to (and do) leave it until the night before. And I know that’s not good, but I really can’t help it because all the fun has been taken out of it, so why would I want to write it in the first place. Plus, I know most teachers will just assign it because they have to. I write every college paper that way-introduction, 3 paragraph (or so) reasoning, and conclusion. That's it and no one even questions it. However, with this paper, I went home from our workshop class and actually started working on it. I was surprised with myself. I appreciate what you try to do in class with your workshops. I never thought about writing this way and it is improving my critical thinking. I can't wait to see if you like my paper!

    Sofia Feggulis

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  20. Salutations and Greetings Dr. Rich,

    First and foremost, love the Flinstone reference. It makes the learning experience more fun. I'm an expert in being creative when it comes to writing and I do believe every creative writer tends to Flinstone. I could write a whole story if I could. However, I do have one fatal flaw. I always tend to freeze up just when things get interesting mid writing and I loose my train of thought. It's because ever since middle school and high school, I like others saw writing as more of a task or assignment for a grade instead of a product of creativity. But thanks to you expanding my mindset, I can have more fun with my writing. Can't wait to share my paper with you.

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  21. Unfortunately, I believe our teachers encourage us to “Flintstone”. Being taught not to do it is hard to hear and understand. We are so used having Flintstone papers, when a teacher tells you not to do this, you get extremely confused. In class Dr. Rich went through our papers and praised each one, but also gave us criticism. She crossed paragraphs and pages off everyone’s pages and this truly confused us. We think, isn't this what you wanted and now your crossing it off? Being taught this way is very different from our “norm”. When writing my paper for comedy it felt unreal to not write a introduction or conclusion and leave it so abruptly. It felt incomplete when I handed it in and now I feel uneasy, not knowing if I will reflect the work my teacher truly wants. I think it will take time for me to truly adapt these skills, which is never a bad thing. Being stuck in ways for a period of time it is gonna take a period to actually accept something new. Reading through my papers now I am starting to eliminate and cross out the “Flintstone” kind of writing. I am looking at my introductions and conclusions as a waste of words. Why am I writing words that are just to fill a paper and have no meaning to my actual interpretation. I want to give my paper a straight to the point kind of purpose and allow my readers to truly know what I am thinking.

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  22. While reading Flintstoning: Where Does It Start blog, I began applying it to the shows that inspired my Senior Seminar Project. The shows that truly did inspire it were: Grimm, Supernatural, The Dresden Files, Hawaii Five-0, etc. and I noticed with Detective Fiction they do tend to start slow. Even in certain films they start slow like Avengers, Star Wars, Lord of the Rings, etc. I always thought that is how you build the world you are trying to create. Yes they have some action scenes in between the episodes or in the film, but I've always noticed that I enjoyed getting to know the characters and how the work. You also see Flintstoning on shows on Netflix and Amazon that have an 8-13 episode seasons.

    Since I read a lot of comics mostly from Marvel, I noticed that comics rarely use Flintstoning. Since a comic is only 23-25 pages an issue, the writers have to snag the reader quickly. That is probably the one form of media where I prefer no Flintstoning and my attention is focused. I think it all comes down to the individual who is reading the piece or watching the movie or television show. Where I prefer to embrace the world and its characters another individual might simply want to get to the action or hook. In literature what intrigues me to a novel or a comic book is the story. What is it about? If it is an detective story, movie or television show then I want to embrace the twist and turns that accompanies that particular genre.

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  23. As a kid, I used to watch the Flintstones all the time (even now sometimes too)! When I saw the title for this blog, I was very intrigued on what it would be about and how it would lend itself to my papers. However, once I read thorough the blog, it opened my mind on how to pull in a reader with the first sentence of the blog! I have always tried to have creative titles for my papers, that way I have an entrance into my paper and a topic to stay focused on. I tend to ramble on when I speak and sometimes I type my papers as if I would speak it; in other words, sometimes I think I am focused on my topic but I end up going off talking about something else that doesn’t have to do with my topic. I think it’s a good idea to have a specific topic to focus on because it also makes it an easier read for the person reading or grading the paper. When I read a paper, I want to be pulled in right away, not half way through the paper. I think a lot of schools teach their students how to write papers well, but they also teach them how to fill their page space with quotes without really proving their point. They always use filler words or vaguely state what they will be talking about in the paper, when they should be “landing their helicopter” and focusing on one small paperclip for their paper.

    -Victoria Matthies

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  25. I was recommended this blog post to help write one of my papers and I am glad I read this. My paper had a lot of “flintstoning” involved and it is important that I stop doing this if I want a well written paper. It is hard for me to understand the concept of flintstoning because it is something that has been accepted by so many of my professors. They have accepted crappy work from many students and students have formed a habit of flintstoning in all their essays. I believe Dr.Rich has taught us a new way of writing that I am not accustomed to but will benefit me for the rest of my English courses. College students have to stop summarizing and start diving in more deeply into their essays, breaking apart quotes and getting into the juicy part. It will take me some time to stop flintstoning, it is not something I wish to do, I naturally do it without realizing. It is something I was taught to do by other professors teaching ways for writing. I have to write a whole introduction before actually getting to my point which usually starts on the second page. An introduction usually involves summarizing and paraphrasing which is when the flintstoning begins. I will continue to work on these new writing skills Dr.Rich has taught us this semester. I know she means well and only wants us to improve our writing skills for our future essays as we become future teachers.

    - Ashley Cisneros

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  26. As a human, it is safe to say that everyone hates ‘flintstoning.’ Just get to the point and be direct in what you want to say and what you are talking about. But, why it is that all my teachers in the past have taught me the complete opposite. They tell me to write a huge introduction that is basically just a paraphrase on what I am about to talk about. It would be filled with unnecessary sentences that have little to nothing to do with the subject of the paper. This is all just to have the introduction be almost the first-page length so I would be able to meet any requirements needed. Or an old teacher and professor would ask us to write a paper on 5 different topics in 2 pages. It is surprising that they allow ‘flintstoning’ a lot but when it comes to everyday things, do we really want to deal or experience that around us. I know if I was in an argument with someone, I would not want them to spend ten minutes on a speech just to tell me what they really meant. I would want them to get straight to the point so I can understand the situation clearly. “Don’t beat around the bush.” Saying what you have to say will engage the readers. It may seem like without ‘flintstoning’ it would be hard to have to access information to make up space in the paper but there are other ways.

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  27. Dr. Rich,

    This is such an important post. I feel that this not only applies to college students, but it also applies to middle school and high school students as well. I think in middle school we are taught to flintstone, on purpose. I think the attempted learning objective from previous teachers was to give our minds something to chew on. Part of this tactic was to also get our minds going. I do not think that the intention of those teachers (or any teacher for that matter) was to fail students. It can apply to adult authors as well. This idea of "Flintstoning" needs to be addressed in order for people to become better writers. Before becoming a better writer and finding the focus of what someone is writing about, we first need to de-clutter our minds. If our minds are cluttered and we are trying to write about something, it may help us feel better. However, in the long run - more often times than not - the end result comes out as un-organized and yucky. The binary opposition of yucky is clean. So if a particular written piece is yucky, it can very easily be cleaned up with a little bit of elbow grease. Clean writing is the best kind of writing. If writing is not clean or clear, that means that it has no structure. There is nothing worse than not being able to follow a written piece. If the author can not capture the audience in a clean way, they need to rewrite their piece. As a result, it is not enjoyable for the audience to read un-clear writing.

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  28. I can recall our first workshop on our two-page draft of A Midsummer Night’s Dream. I came into class with the mindset of believing that the workshop would be pointless. I have had numerous writing workshop in previous courses and students would swap papers and leave little to no comments. The professor would not even glance over our drafts. Due to this, I had the same expectation for your writing workshop. To my surprise, this did not happen as you picked apart my paper. I was glad that half of the class did not know it was my paper as I did not put my name on it. You stated that the first page, and a half, involved material that was not needed. It wasn’t until we reached the second page where I grabbed your attention and interest. I was agitated that you crossed out the first page and a half as that meant I had to rewrite the entire paper from scratch. It did not occur to me until the next day when I re-read my paper and realized that I had flintstoned the entire paper. I gave information that was already known and repeated myself. I believe this is because I am used to writing the traditional five paragraph paper that includes an introduction, three body paragraphs, and a conclusion. I am used to summarizing; therefore, it was hard to get out of that habit and start my paper immediately with material that leaps forward. I believe that my writing has gotten better due to not flintstoning and boring my readers.

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  29. "Flintstoning" is a concept that has been helping me for the past two years. Once I learned about how my use of paraphrasing and utter use of fluff was damaging my overall work, I made sure to do my best to prevent it from happening not only in my poetry papers, but my papers for all my classes. Students and writers in general should be able to dive deep into their paper and concentrate on their message or point, and not the number of pages. (See "how many pages" blog post)

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  30. I am a contributor of Flinstoning. Many times my teachers or professors have told me that I should just cut to the good stuff. Those comments have left me feeling frustrated many times because it often means that I have to rewrite, edit, or even delete a lot of my work in order to really get to the good stuff. Being stubborn, I get upset because I think that my work was already good so I don’t understand why I have to scrap that and start fresh. However, without fail every time I rewrite my paper, the final is always a million times better than the first one I wrote. Like I said in the Landing the Helicopter post, I have always had a hard time finding the central focus (or paper clip) and sticking to it without broadening the spectrum or getting thorough instead of deep. This also goes with the idea of flinstoning because I often fill my papers with summarizing, paraphrasing, and/or restating rather than just getting into the important stuff that is fun to write and read.
    Through Dr. Rich’s class I have learned how to be deep in my writing. I have practiced these techniques throughout the semester and I feel as though I am coming out as a better writer. As I’m reading texts now, even if I don’t have to write a paper on them, I am looking for understanding through sounds, tone, words, and many more aspects to understand themes, plots, and the story overall. As a writer sitting down to work on a piece, my mind often becomes cluttered with ideas and sometimes I struggle to get them down on paper. Through this technique of watching out for my flintstoning, I can see where my paper really takes-off and work off of that.

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  31. Unfortunately, some of our professors give a ridiculously high page count for such a basic topic. It's hard to write a 15 page paper and have every page be well written straight to the point surrounded by an powerful evidence. Some papers leave us students hunting for more evidence to throw in the paper to meet the required page or word count. Some of the evidence isn't even all that great either. It supports our topic but can you live without it. Of course. That extra evidence that we added was an extra stair to climb. It didn't bring the nuance factor nor an eye opening factor neither for you or myself. If professors allowed us to write a paper that contains all the mandatory factors, opening, evidence, thesis, and closing than why should they enforce a page count. The professor is wasting their time reading pages of little to no value.

    For my papers, I have started to start a list of ideas that I can incorporate into my paper so that it is not filled with fluff but with a high page count, I can only have so many ideas. I even research ideas and some are not worth incorporating.

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  32. Dr. Rich,

    Unfortunately I can relate to this post all too well. While I’m sitting here reading your post, I had to reread the same paragraph 4 times because my dad and boyfriend kept talking to me and I couldn’t get through the damn sentence!! I almost felt like they were anchoring me into their conversation into letting me write into my own journey. The spinning in my head and the promise that I made to myself that I would sit down and finish 5 blog posts I expected of myself and then I tried something new like sitting downstairs on my couch to do this and now I know why I sit in my room. I always need to be in my safe spot to write because that’s where no one can bother me and I can be ALONE. I can really vroom vroom in my room and get going and I feel like once I get going I don’t stop and I love that feeling once I start writing. Just like Fred!

    Nancy Koster ENG4817

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  33. I honestly never realized I “Flintstoned” before you started asking that question in class about our poems. “Where does it start?” I didn’t understand - it starts at the beginning. Where else would it start? Not true. It starts at take-off. Which I get now. Sometimes when I’m reading another’s work I can’t exactly pinpoint where it starts but I guess that’s something I’ll have to work on. More importantly, I have to work on my own writing. All too often, I talk, talk, talk at the start of a paper but don’t dive in until a few paragraphs later. I think I do this because I don’t feel like I really get my mojo until I write for a bit and then get into it. I will in the future, look back and cross out my “flintstoning” areas of a paper. Who said you can’t start a piece of work where you originally intended to be the middle? Next time, I’ll try and see where it takes me.

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  34. The term "flinstoning" is one that I have never heard until this class. It's also an idea that I never actually thought about while writing. When we read our poems and you asked "Where does it start?" for the first time, I was confused, but also very interested. I had never heard a teacher ask that before about any of my papers, because I always assumed it started at the first line. But now after hearing about "flinstoning" I see exactly what you mean. I read some of my old papers and realized that they don't actually "start" until halfway down the first page. This concept will definitely help me improve my writing which is something I am always trying to do.

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  35. Oftentimes when I find myself Flintstoning, it is because I am uncomfortable with the topic or need to have a "runway" of words before the real portion of the poem begins. For me, Flintstoning is a way for me to beat around the bush on the topic so that I can avoid feeling the complete and full impact of the emotions that I am writing down on paper.

    Another question that I do have about Flintstoning, though. Can Flintstoning ever be a good thing? In the short video clip, you can tell that Fred Flintstone is booting up his "car." You know that he is in his car and is able to run it because of the fact that he is booting up. That is simply a transition to go to the next scene (or line in terms of poetry). But I guess that it does makes sense that with poems, the reader knows that they are reading a poem and does not need that start up. Let's get straight to the meat and bones of the poem -- the thick and juicy part of it to really fulfill the readers and give them something to think about.

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  36. “Where does it begin?” is a question that, again, should have been brought up from the moment we, as students, were taught to really WRITE. This question is so vital because what a waste of time would it be to write a paper and it truly doesn’t even start until the second page? Asking myself this question when writing is something I will keep on a sticky note to remind myself to get to the point and make it good. Although some pieces require a back story or some sort to give readers a history, it’s still important to make sure it takes off as soon as possible. I believe this is important because you don’t want your reader to be bored. I’ve peer reviewed and in my head thought “Why do we care?, What is the point? I see you are trying to fill the page.” All of these questions and observations based on me wanting to understand what my peer is really writing about without them actually telling me verbatim. I as well am a victim of over writing to the point that it’s easy to get lost in my writing. Flintstoning can take readers to a place where they either have to force themselves through because it’s a part of the assignment, or just put the piece down/skip it and move forward.

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  37. comment by Michael Loberfeld

    In an other class I took in the past, in which we made persuasive speeches, I recall the professor emphasizing how important it is to both start and end one's argument in a powerful way. This concept doesn't apply only to speeches, it also applies to writing. A writer really wants their reader to 'feel them' at the start (and end) of their piece. I personally struggle with getting rid of Anything from my writing, but, as Dr. Rich points out, it is often necessary to edit. If writing is too general, a reader might come to think (rightly or wrongly) that they will not gain anything too new from reading the generalities. That is why a specific opening is often more effective: an image or detail that amazes and pulls in the audience is great. Think about it: our life started with our birth, but when we tell a story, we do not always start with our birth! We start with what is most powerful and relevant to our point. There will be times that an introduction is best eliminated and recycled in some way to use in another piece of one's writing in the future. We can often make many poems out of the ideas in one poem. This gives me comfort, in knowing that anything eliminated from a rough draft, is not forever gone, it can be used in the future. However, the main idea is that we want to clearly convey an experience in our poem, and need not convey All of our experiences all at once. Getting feedback from another person works wonders in helping me decide where to start a poem. In the same way, that when we meet someone, we want to start strong: with a smile and handshake and a name, similarly we need to start strong in a poem, by putting our best idea forward!
    -Michael Loberfeld

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  38. Unfortunately, I have come to realize that in all of my academic papers in the past 'flinstoning' was part of them. Whether it be because I had to reach a certain page limit, or I had trouble articulating my opinion in the right way. But, now after reading the landing the helicopter post as well as the flinstoning post I can now apply it to the poems I write and the papers as well. I can get straight to the point of the paper or poem and feel confident that my readers are getting the most of what I'm saying. I no longer need a buildup because the main point should be strong enough to carry the whole piece.

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  39. I spent my entire high school career 'flinstoning' my way through papers... and being taught to do so. 'Jumping into action' was anti-anecdotal and was not considered academic. Papers had to begin with some stupid question or a quote and then followed by something to the effect of; "In Alice and Wonderland, Lewis Carroll challenges many long-withstanding traditions of 19th Century England..." and then another five dull sentences later until I'd finally be allowed to get to WHAT those long-withstanding traditions actually were (in a set of three!- because, god forbid I wanted to talk about just one.)
    Thankfully, most college professors have encouraged against such ridiculousness; because who wants to read words for word's sake? WE WANT STORIES, ORIGINAL THOUGHTS, MIND-OPENING EXPLORATIONS, NOT REGURGITATION.

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  40. As a writer, I realize that it may take a few lines, a few paragraphs, or even a few rough drafts of putting my ideas down to reveal what I was trying to say the whole time. That in itself is normal and I have never sat back and looked at it as "Flinstoning". I believe it is a totally normal way of writing whether that be poetry, essay, or even a haiku. Going forward, I have realized that I need to spend more time pre-writing even though I am strong headed in the fact that I think I always have my idea and message down on the first try. It is okay to need to take time and examine and edit. That is a very important part of writing and putting forth exactly what you want to your audience. Once a writer realizes this, it will transform them into an even better writer. It relates itself to lots of things. It takes a few tries and editing to get it right!

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  41. The most difficult part of any paper for me is "Flinstoning" and taking off with that first idea. I often don't pay attention to the fact I am doing it always and it can lead to stale introductions that state the obvious of what I'm attempting. After getting an essay or poem off the ground I know realize I have to trim that fat at beginning so its more compacted and not so overstated. It is important to edit the build up to discovering what is you want to cover.
    - Griffin Bond

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  42. When i write any poem i find myself "working the metaphor". I find it very difficult to land my helicopter as i stated in your previous blog post. I noticed in other comments that our education system has practically taught is to Flintstone. In a sense you may even call it fluff. I hope as time passes along, i will be able to overcome my struggle and write my raw emotions with imagery onto paper or even a screen!

    -Racquel F

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  44. Dr Rich,

    I really like the way this blog explains the Fred flinstone effect. It's like you said sometimes you just have to take a step back and then go from there. This i can relate too. Sometimes we just put all our thoughts down on paper and then finally somewhere along the lines and words is where our story begins.

    Leighann Soto

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  45. I constantly find myself “stuck” when writing. I become more worried about “Am I writing this correctly? Is this what my professor wants?”. I end up throwing words on a page, not really sure what they mean, and simply fluffing the paper to make it sound good. In the workshop this past week, the class telling me where they believed my paper started was helpful. I realized that I was following the traditional five paragraph essay format rather than jumping into my main points. Unintentional fluff was placed, and I did not realize how far down in my paper that it really began. I’ve learned that focusing in on the point directly and quickly will engage the reader immediately and not make the writing sound so boring. Without doing so I can lose my readers. I hope to better organize my work in this next draft, engaging my reader right away- landing the helicopter.

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  46. I think the example of Flinstone using the car is to show us that we have to take out the unnecessary part of the essay, such as cliches, paraphrases, introductions and conclusions, etc. I learned something that completely changed how I see the structure of the essay in this class. It is really no reason to follow the structure: introduction, three body paragraphs, and the conclusion. Looking back at my former essays, following this format actually made me put a lot of repetitions in the essays, which is just like driving a car using your legs: what is the point of the car then? It also felt much easier and freer without following the rules. I remember when I started writing the essay for Poetry class, I got straight to the point, and reading it afterwards made me realize that cutting out the unimportant parts not only made the essay much more concise, but also it keeps the readers focused on the most important points.

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  47. This blog has really been helping me understand writing on a deeper level. Teaching me how to be more mindful of my readers. When I’m reading something that starts to lose my interest I begin to space out. I start skimming sentences until something grabs my attention again. Now when I’m writing my papers I’ll think to myself, “Would I skim over this sentence if I was the reader?”. “Where does this paper actually begin?”.

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  48. In classes we are taught to write nothing but a five paragraph essay, which means intro, 3 body paragraphs, and a conclusion paragraph. Growing up I absolutely hated it! Whenever I had to write a paper I always started with my body paragraphs and would get stuck when I had to do the introduction and conclusion paragraphs. I just found it so stupid why do I have to write a summarization of my paper when people are going to read the real thing! Then have to reword my summarization again? It was so tedious. JusT like Fred Flintstone the shuffling of the feet as fast as he can but he goes nowhere.

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  49. The term "flinstoning" is one that I have never heard until this class. It's also an idea that I never actually thought about while writing. When we read our poems and you asked "Where does it start?" for the first time, I was confused, but also very interested. I had never heard a teacher ask that before about any of my papers, because I always assumed it started at the first line. But now after hearing about "flinstoning" I see exactly what you mean. I read some of my old papers and realized that they don't actually "start" until halfway down the first page. When I first start to write, I usually start with just filler ideas that lead up to the main point, not knowing that I was actually doing a disservice to my papers. This has been done to almost every piece of writing I have done now that I think about it. Now when I write, and not just poetry, I will look at my introductions and ask ‘Where does this actually start?” This question is very important because many of us tend to spend some time starting up before we actually take off. It is important to take out the “start up” in some cases because it takes away from what you are trying to say. Flinstoning should be taught to all writers so that everyone can improve their writing. This concept will definitely help me improve my writing which is something I am always trying to do.

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  50. Reworking of the post/after giving it some time for me to understand and gain some hands on experience...

    Oftentimes when I find myself Flintstoning, it is because I am uncomfortable with the topic or need to have a "runway" of words before the real portion of the poem begins. For me, Flintstoning is a way for me to beat around the bush on the topic so that I can avoid feeling the complete and full impact of the emotions that I am writing down on paper.

    Another question that I do have about Flintstoning, though. Can Flintstoning ever be a good thing? In the short video clip, you can tell that Fred Flintstone is booting up his "car." You know that he is in his car and is able to run it because of the fact that he is booting up. That is simply a transition to go to the next scene (or line in terms of poetry). But I guess that it does make sense that with poems, the reader knows that they are reading a poem and does not need that startup. Let's get straight to the meat and bones of the poem -- the thick and juicy part of it to really fulfill the readers and give them something to think about.

    What I have learned after reading the chapter Music of the Lines and giving Flintstoning some more thought, there is a difference between Flintstoning and context. I guess that may have been my question before. There are some things in poems that are not necessary and are simply “runway words.” Although they are part of the poem or the original draft, it’s not exactly needed in the final draft of the poem if the piece is to be as effective and powerful as possible. Context is different because it gives the reader a history or background to the poem. In this way, it is considered essential. I think that context can be found in the form of an epigraph with a single quote or even in the poem, scattered throughout.

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  51. For me, my "Flinstoning" lies more in me feeling the need to write exactly what my audience wants to hear or, what will impress them? I also get caught in the fear that no one wants to hear what I write, or that it isn’t important enough to print out in ink. I run away from topics that delve too deep, where the true and powerful stories really are! I find myself tripping over the idea of what will win the hearts of my audience, rather than telling my story and putting hope and compassion in what I have to say. Instead, I should write what I want my audience to feel, keeping them in mind yes, but not making them the central focus on my writing. My stories and feelings will always find a home in the heart and mind of someone else, just as long as I give them the hard truth and not spare any details. How could I call myself a true writer if I wasn't trying to make my audience re think or change their perspective, rather than spoon feeding them sugar? I couldn't. I must always keep in mind that my true purpose is in my message and the feelings I can invoke. To get over my flintstoning, I must come to love my own writing and give it the voice it deserves to be hard. Without that, I feel my words would be shaky, and that for sure my audience would know.

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  52. I also have an issue with "Flintstoning" with my paper throughout my school years. I think how to start writing when I'm handed assignments from other classes, and worry too much what's a good beginning to introduce the topic or story. The example of the show "The Flintstone" is a great observation of how I'm "Flintstoning" ideas to get going. It takes time to think about it, as in the show, they run their feet on and on, before they get going. This example is a way that I'm not getting somewhere with an idea if I keep rolling on the same foot. The action has to take now and get moving. It's hard to think of something at first, before I go onto where I'm getting at. Just like with essays and poems, a spark of an inspiration in the beginning, catches readers attention to keep reading. The other part of "Flintstoning" is when does it stop? Sometimes I don't know if I'm going to far with my writing, that I can't put on my breaks when it's the end of the story or poem's conclusion. The point is to spark an idea and get it going till it reaches its destination.

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  54. I find this blogpost the most meaningful to me because I put a lot of pressure on myself to write well from the beginning to the end. When I became familiar with Flinestoning I saw it as an important step needed in order to get to what I wanted. Flinestoning helps me take all the garbage out. It is impossible for me to filter in my own head. I can’t create clear ideas without clearing out my mind and seeing my thoughts. After I finish writing, I always ask myself what adds nothing? How can I keep my message the same with the least amount of words? I have to be careful and only think of the function of each word or else I end up with work full of sentences that don’t serve a purpose. Sometimes I end up with sentences I don’t want to give up because I will miss them. In order to let go I think of flinestoning and how it serves as my training wheels, but eventually I will need to let go and hope I know when to brake.

    Wilneris

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  55. I struggle with “Flinstoning” a lot! I often have so many ideas I feel I need to talk about or hit points a professor wants me to touch on. It wasn’t until this blog post that I came to terms with the fact there has been a solution all along. The feeling of being too overwhelmed with information or the “recoil” before taking off could have been taken care of. All I needed to do was delve deeper into what I was reading. To take a step closer to the works I was reading and find a solid theme. I was too far up in the helicopter and simply needed to come down to gather a clear perspective. Too often do I not slow down which not only affected my reading but my writing as well.

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  56. I had no idea what the concept of Flinstoning was when I first heard about it, however after reading the blog and experiencing it in class it has really helped. When we were first asked, "where does the poem start for you?" I always thought it started at the first line. However, after putting it into practice I realize that is not always the case. I never realized the beginning didn't have to be the beginning. I went though old work and realizing I could see where the ideas were building up speed and where they actually took off. I now know I can look for it in future work, which I think helps me immensely. I realize I can write what I need to write to get to the take off point, and revise it all out later, instead of worrying about making the perfect opening sentence.

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  57. I tend to ramble on about things that have nothing to do with the beginning subject matter. Do not we all do this? Okay, now I am just making excuses for myself. Some can call it beating around the bush. Others may call it sugar coating and not getting to the point - or even in some cases the person who is Flintstoning may be covering up the point due to a number of reasons including fear of failure, shame, not being good enough, anxiety, etc. Sometimes I fear that my introduction will not be satisfactory to my professor because most of them like an introduction a certain way which is totally not my style but hey, I will give them what they ask for. My fifth grade teacher, Mr. Morris was a true rockstar alongside Dr. Rich. He gave me one of the best pieces of advice anyone could have ever given me. He told me, “no matter how far you go in school, or in life - always figure out how your teacher (or your boss) ticks and give them what they want.” Wow, how astonishing to entertain the thought of no paranoia and no anxiety if you just give the teacher what they want! As a college student, I can appreciate Mr. Morris’s advice and still go by it, but I will also add to it. Not only will I give them what they want, but I will add upon it and elaborate on my interpreted opinion of the selected prompt. That is the problem with dating these days, close to no one is able to hold an intelligent conversation with someone else who they find attractive. Is it wrong to build attraction non-sexually? There I go again - where does my blog post response begin? Got ya there, Dr. Rich!

    Lexie Grell

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  58. Leave it to Dr. Rich to come up with some of the most interesting names you have ever heard! In high school they tell you 5 paragraphs, nothing more and absolutely nothing less. Those essays needed have the “meat and potatoes” not “veggies” the more detail the better. They would even tell us that if we couldn’t think of anything to make up a story and relate it to the prompt. Majority of my flinstoning is done when I'm trying to meet a specific page requirement. When writing my poems, I add all this fluff or as you call it “editorializing” just to get my point across in a way that will interest my reader. You taught me that it is okay to just get directly to the point. And sometimes it takes writing everything I need to write to get to the best part of my work. The workshops have aided in my flinstoning recovery because It helps to get a fresh pair of ears or eyes when it comes to m work. I find myself sitting on the cusp of greatness but I’m missing a sentence or feeling that would send my work over the edge. I noticed I flinstone a lot when I’m speaking as well. I give all this useless information, that I could have avoided, right before I get to whole point of the conversation.

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  59. Leave it to Dr. Rich to come up with some of the most interesting names you have ever heard! In high school they tell you 5 paragraphs, nothing more and absolutely nothing less. Those essays needed have the “meat and potatoes” not “veggies” the more detail the better. They would even tell us that if we couldn’t think of anything to make up a story and relate it to the prompt. Majority of my flinstoning is done when I'm trying to meet a specific page requirement. When writing my poems, I add all this fluff or as you call it “editorializing” just to get my point across in a way that will interest my reader. You taught me that it is okay to just get directly to the point. And sometimes it takes writing everything I need to write to get to the best part of my work. The workshops have aided in my flinstoning recovery because It helps to get a fresh pair of ears or eyes when it comes to m work. I find myself sitting on the cusp of greatness but I’m missing a sentence or feeling that would send my work over the edge. I noticed I flinstone a lot when I’m speaking as well. I give all this useless information, that I could have avoided, right before I get to whole point of the conversation.

    Donika H. (Forgot to add my name)

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  60. When I first started my career college I thought that the five paragraphs way the way to write until I took research and tech and had create a research paper and realized that I had to frame things different. I started working on condensing my work and getting it down to the meat but, it wasn’t until I got into poetry that the question of “where it starts” became a thing for me. I realize that with poetry there isn’t any real space to Flinstone but, in the beginning of the semester there wasn’t anything that stopped me from trying to Flinstone my way to the top. However the more I started to realize how poems were created and how important imagery was I didn’t have a urge to Flinstone as much once I realized it kind of harmed my paper and didn’t fully allow my poem to flourish. I remember my first poem about the struggles of school and how expensive everything is and I looked at it and began Flinstoning trying to work around the idea of school. However once I looked back at it and received some edits I realized that the Flinstoning was uncalled for and that I was able to write a poem that was immaculate without needing to Flinstone. In my more recent pieces of work I’ve spent more personal time making sure that I chose good places to start my poems and work free from Flinstoning. I’m excited for this lesson because I can use it in all my classes when it comes to writing papers. (Lester Ellis III)

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  61. The use of metaphors in this blog were intriguing. Using Fred Flinstone and describing how his car spins and spins and basically gets him nowhere can relate to how we write sometimes. For example, sometimes when we have such structured rules in our writing, we can spin around and not make much sense. Was always used to the 5 paragraph rule in High School; intro, 3 body, and a conclusion of course! I would always start with my introduction because that is what I was always taught. By doing this, I found myself flintstoning in my writing and it pushed my creative writing to the corner. It can also form writer’s block which I have experienced on many levels with structured writing. When writing freely, it helps the creative side some out and can lead to much drafts to find out where the writing really takes off. It's important during any form of my writing to realize what moment really leaps forward and grabs the audience's attention. The use of revision is key to reaching this point in my writing as well. The idea of “starting your work where it starts” will be helpful in my future writing as it can give me room to get all of my ideas down. As we've discussed in class, we are asked the question “where does it start?” Sometimes it takes many drafts to get to where you want to be with your writing. If my poems didn't start where they were intended to, it would be difficult to revise and take out information to lead me to a better written poem. When it comes to reading, I like the idea of scanning and skimming through to see where the moment of take off sets in and read from there. These two different ideas for reading and writing can help me to write more creatively.

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  62. First and foremost, I love the use of the Flintstone's car as a metaphor. I used to ask that same question as a child. It never made sense.

    I think for me it's hard to find the start of my poem unless I workshop it with my classmates. During the time of writing, I try to make sure my feelings and/or words are understood by the reader. I end up using many adjectives or get into my own head and not necessarily mess up the poem but clutter it. Sometimes less is more and more is cluttersome.

    I recently wrote a poem and with the help of my teacher and fellow class-poets, I understand my poem is within the poem.

    Here's an example:
    A.

    I…...
    Plump petals partitioned by searing moisture,
    Savoring taste of luscious mint and heated barley lingers
    Each sigh deepens with a humming sensation
    Warm embrace shifts to an intense clutch,
    Fondled cheeks relaxes a pulsing tulip’s pucker

    B. (Found the start)

    Plump petals searing moisture,
    Mint and heated barley
    Each sigh deepens into humming
    Embrace yields to clutching,
    Pulsing tulip’s pucker
    Mmm


    It is the same poem but I understand where it started. There are times when I see where it should start then I second guess myself. Then again, they say follow your intuition.

    I'll try.

    Meagan AWP 5000

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  63. Dr. Rich,

    This post resonated with me because my first paragraph always feels like a draft. It is when I begin thinking of everything I am trying to say. Once I get in the groove of my paper, by the second or third paragraph is when I am getting into the focus point of my paper. I do end up going back to the previous paragraphs to touch it up and make sure it is staying on the purpose of my paper. I think I was programmed to keep the fluff of a paper so that it reaches the requirements of the paper. I feel as though if teachers did not give requirements for the page length, but gave the information that it needs to be addressed within the paper, students would get right the point from the beginning. Especially in a day in age where we tweet under 140 characters, we are used to getting directly to the point, but when we are asked to write 1000-1500 word papers, it causes us to add extra things that may not have any purpose in our paper. One of my papers that I wrote in high school, I wrote a whole summary of the author and a summary of the part of the book that I wanted to discuss. I received an A for the assignment; however, I had a lot of fluff when really my paper actually began in the middle of the third paragraph when I began to address what I wrote for my thesis. My teachers then must have been programmed to read these types of papers and that is what I expected to do for all teachers (which most of them accepted it that way as well).

    Janaya M- ENG3215*4

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  64. Yes, Yabba-Dabba-Doo, Dr. Rich! Meet the Flintstones, they're the modern Stone Age Family, from the town of Bedrock, they're a page right out of history!! "Wilma!!!" One of my favorite childhood cartoons/memories.

    With that, I recall my Flinstoning moment actually started when I re-entered into college.

    During my first semester back, I certainly "Ha Ya!" My brain was revving up—and seem to go nowhere. It was as though everything I thought I knew I had lost. And everything I lost became anew.

    It appeared that education had evolved entirely, and I was left behind. And then just like that, the inevitable happened. I was assigned my first writing piece after many years, spinning my pins—vroom vroom, entertained doubts, try this and that and decided to seek help.

    And when I thought I regain all the knowledge there is to gain, I met you and now learn not to tolerate Flintstoning and just take-off into a new journey of discovery.

    No doubt, when you're with the Flintstones, have a Yabba-dabba-doo time, a Dabba-doo time in Shakespeare Survey!

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  65. Out of all the advice I got for writing it’s that you have to get right into it. I’ve been told this by a couple of professors now. In a weird way it feels good to just jump into a writing piece with none of the fluff. It’s like jumping into a cold pool immediately submerging your body instead of walking into the deep end slowly submerging your body. The ladder is tortuous and painful. Just like putting fluff into your writing. You don’t want to write it and no one wants to read it. It also trains your brain to cut all the useless parts of your writing. Since school has taught us to add introduction paragraphs that are just padding to get our page count, we are used to adding information that has no value. We’re used to not starting our paper right away. So cutting that out forces us to add something of worth to substitute. After awhile of doing this you can tell when someone is just writing to hit a word or page limit. This also helps your paper stand out. It shows you're here for business. You’re not here to dilly dally. You have something to share and you're gonna share it. It’s taking pride in what you have to say. You don’t want to taint your writing with fluff. That's why I love this advice and it’s something I’ll always remember.
    -Julio Velazquez

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  66. Dr.Rich holds a unique form of teaching that eagers the student like myself to want to attend class. She mentions the word Flinstoning while we had our first writing workshop for the poem The Rape of Lucrece. She uses the childhood icon for many as a form of writing. A piece of work must start immediately once you dive into the work. This is important as writers. The quicker we dive in the quicker the reader will connect to what he/she/they are reading. If the writer lacks in diving right into the topic the reader will quickly lose connection and focus on what you the writer are trying to say. As we write we must add value and importance unto what we are writing and the message that us the writer want to get across. As young highschool students we were taught to start in the beginnig of the essay with a paragraph that summarizes the whole story. That first paragraph according to Dr.Rich is boring and shes right. I never personally enjoyed writing summarizes. I personally enjoy breaking down the text and seeing the text in a way that hopefully the author wants the reader to see. This piece that was given to me by Dr.Rich is one that I will hold forever close to me and I will spread it to others.

    Joe Menocal
    ENG 3215 04

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  67. When it comes to the idea of Flint-stoning, I have mixed feelings about the concept. On one hand, I enjoy the creative name you gave the common practice of leaving text with excessive summary material used to get the paper off the ground. However, while I do agree to a certain extent that it is a problem, I feel in some instances that harping on this issue excessively can lead to other complications. This idea of summarizing material in the beginning of a text is taught to many students due to the fact that their potential future audience may have never heard of the topic. As such, in most of the writing classes I have taken this idea of summarizing in the first paragraph is wordlessly expected. However, while I know your advice is given to avoid excessive repetition, I feel as if some students may accidentally take it as all summarizing is bad. Sure, repeating the same idea or overview again and again can prevent a person from getting into the text due to annoyance. Never mentioning an overview of the topic or your main idea however can leave readers confused on what the point of the paper is. This can in turn cause annoyance much like Flint-stoning and cause people to stop reading. As such, I am afraid that students who hear about Flint-stoning will rush to get into the paper without clearly mentioning their main idea or overview to avoid it. As such, while I am not against warning students against the practice of Flint-stoning, I think it is important to tell students that while Flint-stoning is bad that not clearly communicating your main idea is just as bad.

    Matthew Ponte

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  68. “Flintstoning: Where Does It Start?” When I was in high school we had to read “The Grapes of Wrath” during our summer break. The whole summer myself and my best friend tried getting into this book, we would read it to each other, listen to it on youtube, and even tried spark notes. This book was painfully boring and we would fall asleep everytime trying to read it. I know I am judging the book very harshly but that whole summer I felt “where does it start”. I wanted to know where the book got good and I desperately wanted to get into it. I don’t want my writing to have that effect on people. Sometimes I feel I have trouble with getting my paper started because I do not trust my judgement. My mom and my sister are both very smart and I fell a little behind. I am not saying that I am not smart but I am definitely not on their level and that leads myself to ask a lot of questions. I sike myself a ton when it comes to my writing abilities and no matter how many As and Bs I get I still don’t believe it. It is just luck I say.

    Alyssa Ortiz

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  69. This reminds me of your post "Landing the Helicopter." Often times, myself and many other writers struggle with where to start our papers. We often write and write and write until we think we have clearly explained ourselves, when in reality, we have spent two pages summarizing or trying to make our paper "fancy." Instead of relaying information that is already known, or inserting fun facts about the author of their piece, we should instead dive right into what our papers are really about. I still struggle with this, but I am learning to do away with my traditional process and create a new one.
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    Jessica DeLuca

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  70. Reading this really put into perspective that I can not focus on summarizing a paper. If I do this, it will prevent me from actually reaching my full potential when writing the paper. There is no need to sit down and write a plot summary for half of a paper when in reality all I have to do is write my interpretation of the text and how I view it.

    David Rivera, Jr.

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  71. I have often read, and undoubtedly I have written papers which have the Flintstoning problem.

    I have even read and sadly written papers which never truly begin.

    Ever since high school, I have taken it upon myself to throw out the things I learned about writing papers. Since passing the HSPA and SAT exams, I no longer need to know how to write a cookie cutter essay in 30 minutes.

    But those habits still cling to me sometimes.
    This article serves as a knife with which I can cut them away.

    Sometimes it is useful to collect my thoughts in an opening paragraph or two. But once it has been written and I am on track, I can remember what I am doing, and machete away the fluff.

    -Liam

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